Megatokyo Volume 6 proofreading for Omnibus 2

key:
^ change log from web version to original book
! still needs fixing

pg 258 / [973]
^ p1 "unMod" title enlarged, new notes added: "Not that long ago, under different parameters..." and "Note: Unmod was released before the first chapter in this book..."
! p1 obviously that footnote needs to change. Do we want to put this back in its original place between chap 8 and 9?  {FRED FIX}
^ p4 italics added on "you"

pg 260 / [974]
^ p1 narration altered on account of the inserted page ("Since allowing myself" to "Yesterday I was taken")
^ p3-4 narration boxes combined

pg 261 / [975]
^ p3 "Kya!" to "Gyah!"
^ p4-5 boldface added to all of it, but italics on "wah!!", dash fixed, question mark changed to two exclamation marks
^ p8-9 "Blam!" to "Pop!"

pg 262 / [976]
^ p2 dash fixed
^ p4 "Get Down!!" put in bold and italics
^ p5 "shoots" to "lets off"

pg 264 / [978]
! p3 move question mark out of quotes
^ p4 period to ellipsis

pg 265 / [979]
^ p2 "partner is" to "partner's"
^ p3 "he is" to "he's", period to comma

pg 266 / [980]
^ p3 "someone" to "some chixor", "wack" to "w4ck", "You?" put in italics
^ p4 apostrophe added to "messin", "would have" to "would've"

pg 267 / [981]
^ p3&4 parenthesis replaced with those -><- emote whatever things
^ p8 period removed

pg 6 / freetalk
! change reference to "page 71" (freetalk page before [1068]) to the new pg #

pg 7 / [983]
! p1 put Megagamers in italics, remove quotes
! p move period out of quotes (zombie subtitle)
^ p5 "Guro" footnote changed ("engaged in sexual act" to "Zombies like it.")

pg 268 / [986]
! p2 move comma out of quotes

pg 9 / [987]
^ p1 dashes fixed

pg 11 / [989]
^ p10 "IM?" to "Text msg?", (NOD) to *NOD*

pg 12 / [990]
^ p1 dash to ellipsis, "Hey, where's your computer?" removed
^ p2 "Largo?" to "Uh..."
^ p3 "You left it at Hayasaka's, didn't you?" to "Largo, where is your computer?"
! p6 change (sigh) to *sigh*

pg 13 / [991]
^ p4 "Eh heh," to "Ah..."
^ p5 ellipsis to period

pg 14 / [992]
^ p3 "Ah," to "Oh! Uh..."
^ p9 ". How bad" remmoved

pg 16 / [994]
^ p2 dash fixed
^ p2 "about it" and "say anything at all" removed
^ p3 "anything" to "a word"
! p4 change dashes to em dash
^ p4 "thing" to "things"
^ p5 "got" to "gotten"
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 17 / [995]
^ p2 "these" to "the"
^ p5 "Hm?" and "Might be," added, apostrophe added to "it's", "so maybe" removed

pg 18 / [996]
! p5 syllable break is morn·ing
! p8 The "g" in the door's window logo is not backwards and should be, i.e. see strip [808] or [1025] {FRED FIX}

pg 19 / [997]
! p1 The "g" in the door's window logo is not backwards and should be, i.e. see strip [808] or [1025] {FRED FIX}
! p3 remove extra space in "battle without"
! p8 move question mark out of quotes

pg 21 / [999]
^ p3 italics added on Lockart
^ p4 "moves" to "a move", question mark added

pg 22 / [1000]
^ p1 dash fixed

pg 23 / [1001]
^ p1 background sketched out more and shaded

pg 24 / [1002]
^ p1 dash fixed
^ p2 dash fixed

pg 25 / [1003]
^ p6 "Wah!" to "Eh?", "Oh!" added, dash fixed

pg 129 / [1006]
! p2 put "real" in italics rather than asterisks
! p4 change (sniff) to *sniff* and move outside the brackets

pg 130 / [1007][1008]
! p5 put "really" in italics rather than asterisks

pg 133 / [1013][1014]
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 26 / [1015]
^ p6 dash fixed

pg 29 / [1019]
^ p5 dash fixed
! Here and over the next two pages, you have the phone-side of the conversation in boxes rather than the usual jagged-tail balloon. I'm not sure if that was a conscious choice or not, or if you want to change it at this point. {FRED FIX}

pg 30 / [1020]
^ p3 syllable break fixed

pg 31 / [1021]
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 32 / [1022]
! p3 put Sega in italics
! p4 put Sega in italics (x2)
! p7 put Sega in italics

pg 33 / [1023]
^ p3 removed "Huh?"
^ p4 added "I know", period to exclamation mark
^ p7 "What'll" to "What will"
^ p8 Dom's line changed to English / brackets removed (Not sure why but I presume it was intentional??)

pg 35 / [1025]
^ p4 dash fixed
^ p7 extra period removed

pg 36 / [1026]
^ p1 dash fixed

pg 37 / [1027]
^ p2 dash fixed
! p4 remove the fourth dot from the second ellipsis
^ p9 dash fixed
^ p10 "big" "that landed on me. Really!" removed

pg 38 / [1028]
^ p1 "L...landed on?" removed, dash fixed
^ p2 comma added, dash fixed
^ p3 "san" to "kun"
^ p7 dash fixed

pg 39 / [1029]
! p6 change Ma'm to Ma'am (x2)

pg 41 / [1031]
! p5 Missed a "KLIK." for the white outlining {FRED FIX}

pg 42 / [1032]
^ p3 dash fixed
^ p6 dash fixed
^ p7 dash fixed (x2)

pg 43 / [1033]
^ p4 dash fixed
! p8 There isn't a syllable break there (de·voured) {FRED FIX}

pg 44 / [1034]
^ p2 dash fixed
^ p4 ellipsis removed

pg 47 / [1037]
^ p7 "Ah!" to "Hi"
! p7 add comma after "Hi"

pg 49 / [1039]
^ p7 "d4nge3ous" to "d4ng3rus"
^ p7 dash fixed
! p8 move period out of quotes

pg 51 / [1041]
^ p5 Yuki's line removed
^ p6-7 Yuki's "voiceover" boxes changed to voice balloons

pg 52 / [1042]
^ p4 question mark moved out of quotes
^ p6 "Emi" to "Eimi"
! p7 move period out of quotes

pg 53 / [1043]
! p2 put Lockart in italics
! p3 move period out of quotes
^ p7 dash fixed
! p8 put Cubesoft in italics
! p9 put Sight in italics, remove quotes
! p9 put Lockart in italics

pg 54 / [1044]
! p1 put Cubesoft in italics
! p7 change dashes to em dash
! p9 change dashes to em dash

pg 55 / [1045]
! p4 move period out of quotes
^ p5 Eimi's font size reduced
^ p7 "K..." removed
! p8 put Sight in italics, remove quotes

pg 56 / [1046]
^ p2 "Ryoya" to "Ryouya" (x2)
! p4 change dashes to em dash
! p5 syllable break is proj·ect

pg 57 / [1047]
^ p4 dash fixed
! p5 put Animate in italics

pg 58 / [1048]
! p1 put Animate in italics
^ p2 dash fixed

pg 59 / [1049]
! p4 put Animate in italics
^ p5 Piro's expression changed
! p7 change dashes to em dash
! p8 change dashes to em dash

pg 60 / [1050]
^ p1 "There" put in boldface
! p4 put Animate in italics
^ p4 dash fixed
^ p5 period to exclamation mark

pg 61 / [1051]
! p1 add comma after hi
^ p2 dash fixed

pg 63 / [1053]
^ p2 dash fixed
^ p3 missing period added
^ p7 "N00b" to "N3wb"

pg 64 / [1054]
^ p2 dash fixed
^ p8 missing apostrophe added

pg 65 / [1055]
^ p6 dash fixed
^ brackets and periods added to PA announcement, "Ikebukuro" fixed

pg 66 / [1057]
^ p2 extra comma removed

pg 68 / [1060]
! p1 change "Whatddya" to "Whaddya"
^ p1 "today" removed

pg 69 / [1061]
^ p2 "M-" removed
^ p3 dash fixed

pg 70 / freetalk
! do we want to update "That was about two and a half years ago"? {FRED FIX}
! update "page 250" (comic [1259])

pg 71 / [1068]
! p1 update page # reference or remove if unmod is repositioned to between chap 8 & 9
^ p1 "setting" boxes removed

pg 73 / [1069]
! p3 change (Sigh) to *Sigh*
! p3 add comma after "Yes"

pg 77 / [1073]
^ p1 "little bit of the real" her to "little bit of the 'real' her"
^ p4 brackets removed on Piro's inner monologue
! p4 remove italics on Piro's inner monologue
! p3 northeast and southeast are both one word not two, so add dashes

pg 78 / [1074]
^ p6 second question mark added to "What?"
^ p7 double exclamation mark to comma, exclamation mark to double exclamation mark, dash fixed

pg 79 / [1075]
^ p1 Largo's line added

pg 80 / [1076]
^ p5 "fsk'd" to "fsck'd"

pg 81 / [1077]
^ p2 "Ah!" added
^ p3 dash fixed
! p4 change "was still" to "is still"

pg 82 / [1078]
! p5 move period out of quotes

pg 84 / [1080]
^ p2 ellipsis to dash
^ p6 ellipsis to period
^ p8 exclamation mark to period

pg 87 / [1083]
! p7 change (sigh) to *sigh*

pg 89 / [1085]
! p2 fix missing space in <Ow!My foot!> {FRED FIX}
! p8 add apostrophe to bl33din

pg 90 / [1086]
^ Largo's jacket pattern added

pg 91 / [1087]
! p9 change dashes to em dash

pg 92 / [1088]
! p6 move period into quotes
! p6 put Sight in italics, remove quotes
^ p7 "OK" added, "H...hai." to "O...OK"
! p7 add brackets <> to Kimiko's "O...OK"

pg 99 / [1095]
! p1 add comma after "Hi"
^ p10 apostrophe removed from "its"

pg 102 / [1098]
! p1 add apostrophe to "goin"

pg 103 / [1099]
! p4 unbold that closing bracket

pg 107 / [1104]
! p3 move comma out of quotes

pg 109 / [1106]
^ p6 extra space in "miles we" removed
! p10 "fingerprints" should be one word

pg 110 / [1107]
! p1 add comma after "yes" {FRED FIX}

pg 111 / [1108]
! p1 add comma after "yes"

pg 112 / [1109]
! p4 move period out of quotes

pg 113 / [1110]
^ p9 "Hud33n33" fixed to "Houd33n33"

pg 115 / [1112]
! p3 move period out of quotes

pg 116 / [1113]
! p2 put Girl Phase in italics, remove quotes

pg 117 / [1114]
! p2 move period out of quotes

pg 119 / [1116]
! p9 "backyard" should be one word

pg 120 / [1117]
! p1 "backyard" should be one word
^ p3 dash fixed

pg 121 / [1118]
! p7 unbold that closing bracket

pg 122 / [1119]
! p3 put Cubesoft in italics
! p3 move period out of quotes
^ p5 "identifying" fixed

pg 135 / [1126]
^ p1 dev notes removed

pg 138 / [1130]
^ p3 apostrophe added to "gettin"

pg 140 / [1132]
^ p3 "<Right?>" to "Ne?"
^ p4 "piroshki" note added (though we, ah, mixed up image references and Fred drew a Pirogi instead...) {FRED FIX}?

pg 142 / [1135]
^ p7 "<Uhhh...>" to "<Huhhh...??>"
^ p8 period to exclamation mark

pg 143 / [1136]
! p4 move period out of quotes
^ p8 Miho's expression changed

pg 144 / [1137]
! p3 add comma after "Piro-san"

pg 146 / [1139]
^ p1 "Gynrrr!!" added

pg 150 / [1144]
! p9 put Sony in italics

pg 154 / [1151]
! p5 put Oaty O's in italics and remove hyphen
^ p8 "<Huh?>" removed

pg 158 / [1156]
^ p4 period to ellipsis
^ p6 Kimiko's and Piro's lines rewritten ("Well, it obviously bothered" to "Well, it bothers" and "Weh?" to "Eh?")

pg 159 / [1157]
^ p6 Largo's extra finger removed
! p7 add comma after "morning"

pg 164 / [1163]
^ p2 "Huh?" to "How bad what?" and "What?" added

pg 165 / [1164]
^ p4 ellipsis removed

pg 169 / [1169]
! p5 Not sure about "Mr. Pole-san", that's a Yuki-ism, and Ping is speaking in bracketed Japanese here. {FRED FIX}??.

pg 172 / [1172]
! p2 put Playstation in italics

pg 174 / [1174]
^ p3 syllable break fixed

pg 186 / [1190]
^ p1 apostrophe added to "lets"
^ p3 question mark moved out of quotes
! p4 the filename/timestamp on the photo with Miho on the pillow is a digit too long (Yes, I'm crazy enough to have checked! :P ) {FRED FIX}

pg 188 / [1193]
! p5 move period out of quotes
! p6 change (giggle) to *giggle*

pg 189 / [1195]
! p8 move period out of quotes

pg 190 / [1196]
! p2 change (giggle) to *giggle*

pg 191 / [1197]
^ p1 question mark moved out of quotes
! p4 move period out of quotes

pg 193 / [1199]
^ p1 -kun added
^ p7 -kun added

pg 194 / [1200]
! p1 put Cubesoft in italics
! p2 put Lockart in bold italics unless that doesn't work, then just leave it

pg 198 / [1204]
! p4 "pulled" is one syllable so you can't actually break that there, but I guess there's no other way with the balloon so skinny?

pg 202 / [1208]
! p1 put Endgames in italics, remove quotes

pg 211 / [1217]
! p4 add comma after "best work"
^ p7-9 shading behind Yuki changed

pg 213 / [1219]
^ p1 shading added

pg 222 / [1228]
! p6 remove extra space in "there  is"

pg 224 / [1230]
^ p5 "No" put in boldface and period to exclamation mark

pg 226 / [1232]
! p2 remove extra space in "at  pictures"

pg 229 / [1236]
^ p8 "pap!" sfx added

pg 231 / [1238]
^ p8 Yutaka's line removed

pg 256 / [1266]
^ p1-2 train PA announcements added

pg 257 / [1267]
^ p6 chapter end caption fixed


>>>> Unused DPDs if needed to fill extra pages:
[1056]
[1059]
[1103]
[1120]
[1133]
[1143]
[1145]
[1177]
[1244]
[1269]




Useful for copy/pastes:
^ p ellipsis to period
^ p ellipsis to dashes
! p change dashes to em dash
^ p dash fixed
! p move question mark out of quotes
! p change quotes to italics on 
 {FRED FIX}

The stupid list of one-space sentence breaks that I'm sure only I care about
pg 259/[1268] p4 doctor
pg 260/[974] p7 guy
pg 7/[983] p5 zombie subtitle
pg 9/[987] p6 Kimiko
pg 10/[988] p6 Kimiko
pg 14/[992] p1 Piro, p3 Piro, Piro
pg 15/[993] p4 Piro, p9 Piro
pg 16/[994] p2 Erika, p3 Erika, p4 Erika, p5 Kimiko
pg 17/[995] p2 Kimiko
pg 20/[998] p7 Piro 
pg 25/[1003] p6 Kimiko, Kimiko
pg 26/[1015] p5 Kimiko, p6 fanboy
pg 130/[1007][1008] p8 Yanagisawa
pg 131/[1009][1010] p6 zombie subtile, p8 zombie
pg 27/[1016] p3 Piro, p4 Piro
pg 30/[1020] p4 Piro
pg 31/[1021] p4 Piro
pg 36/[1026] p7 Ririka
pg 37/[1027] p5 Ririka
pg 38/[1028] p7 Yataka, Yutaka
pg 40/[1030] p3 Piro/txt, p7 Piro, p8 Sleepy Shadow
pg 42/[1032] p5 Waltah, p7 Kimiko, Kimiko
pg 45/[1035] p3 Kimiko, Kimiko, p7 Kimiko
pg 48/[1038] p1 Meimi, Piro, p2 Meimi, p3 Piro, p5 Piro, p6 Meimi
pg 49/[1039] p2 Largo
pg 53/[1043] p5 waitress
pg 54/[1044] p6 Piro, p7 fanboy, p8 fanboy, fanboy
pg 57/[1047] p3 lockart person
pg 61/[1051] p2 Yutaka
pg 64/[1054] p1 waitress, p3 waitress, p4 Yuki
pg 66/[1057] p4 fanboy
pg 67/[1058] p2 fanboy, p5 fanboy, fanboy
pg 72/[1068] p2 Largo, p3 Piroko, p8 Largo
pg 73/[1069] p1 cop, cop, p4 cop
pg 84/[1080] p1 fanboy, fanboy, p6 fanboy
pg 85/[1081] p1 fanboy
pg 87/[1083] p1 fanboy
pg 89/[1085] p1 Largo, p2 fanboy
pg 93/[1089] p4 Kenji
pg 94/[1090] p2 zombie
pg 96/[1092] p4 Kimiko, p5 fanboy, p6 Kimiko, Kimiko, p11 Largo, Largo
pg 97/[1093] p2 Largo, fanboy, p5 Largo
pg 100/[1096] p1 Largo, p6 Piro, Piro
pg 101/[1097] p4 Erika, Erika
pg 102/[1098] p6 Piro
pg 105/[1101] p2 Kimiko, p4 Piro
pg 110/[1107] p9 Masamichi
pg 111/[1108] p2 cop, p7 cop
pg 112/[1109] p2 cop, p5 Largo
pg 114/[1111] p3 Yutaka
pg 115/[1112] p2 Kimiko, p4 Sayuri, p7 Erika
pg 117/[1114] p1 Piro, p4 Miho
pg 121/[1118] p1 Masamichi, p5 Masamichi
pg 146/[1139] p6 Moh, Moh, Moh
pg 148/[1141] p1 Ping
pg 149/[1142] p3 Ping
pg 150/[1144] p5 Kimiko
pg 151/[1148] p1 Piro, p5 Erika
pg 152/[1149] p8 Largo
pg 160/[1158] p7 Junko, p11 Junko
pg 161/[1159] p5 Mr Ibara,
pg 164/[1163] p4 Junko
pg 166/[1165] p2 Junko
pg 170/[1170] p2 Yuki
pg 171/[1171] p9 Meimi
pg 172/[1172] p8 Junko
pg 179/[1180] p4 Junko
pg 180/[1181] p2 Yuki, p6 Asako, Asako, p7 Yuki
pg 181/[1182] p1 Asako, p8 Yuki
pg 183/[1185] p6 Yuki, p8 Yutaka, Yutaka
pg 184/[1187] p7 Yuki
pg 185/[1188] p3 Yutaka
pg 186/[1190] p2 Erika
pg 187/[1191] p7 Yuki, Yutaka, p9 Yutaka
pg 188/[1193] p1 Erika, p4 Erika
pg 189/[1195] p6 Erika
pg 195/[1201] p8 Piro
pg 197/[1203] p2 Yuki, Piro
pg 198/[1204] p2 Yuki, p5 Piro
pg 199/[1205] p1 Piro, p5 Kimiko
pg 201/[1207] p4 Yuki, Yuki, Yuki
pg 204/[1210] p6 Kimiko
pg 205/[1211] p1 Pirogoeth, p2 Moh
pg 207/[1213] p8 barkeep
pg 208/[1214] p5 Piro
pg 212/[1218] p3 Yuuji, p6 Yuuji
pg 213/[1219] p9 Largo, Largo
pg 214/[1220] p5 Yuki, Yuki
pg 218/[1224] p7 Erika
pg 220/[1225] p2 Junko
pg 219/[1226] p5 Erika
pg 221/[1227] p3 Kenji
pg 222/[1228] p6 Kenji, Kenji, p8 Kenji
pg 223/[1229] p4 Junko
pg 224/[1230] p1 Yuki, p3 Kenji, p5 Kenji
pg 226/[1232] p2 Mr Ibara, p7 Mr Ibara
pg 228/[1235] p4 Yuki, p8 Yutaka
pg 231/[1238] p1 Yuki, Yutaka
pg 233/[1240] p2 Junko
pg 234/[1241] p7 Ed
pg 236/[1243] p3 Yuki, p4 Kenji
pg 237/[1245] p2 Kimiko
pg 240/[1249] p4 Yuki, p5 Miho
pg 241/[1250] p4 Yuki
pg 242/[1251] p1 Yuki, p7 Yuki
pg 244/[1253] p2 Kimiko
pg 246/[1255] p2 Miho, p3 Miho
pg 250/[1259] p7 Kimiko

plain quotes used: [1268](partially),[1014],[1042](partially),[1043],[1078](partially),[1183](partially),[1213](partially),[1225]
(partially],[1232]
smart quotes used: [1268],[983],[986],[991],[993],[994],[997],[1020],[1037],[1039],[1042],[1043],[1045],[1053],[1054],[1057],[1069],[1072],[1073],[1077],[1078],[1088],[1104],[1105],[1109],[1112],[1113],[1114],[1119],[1128],[1132],[1154],[1167],[1172],[1174],[1175],[1178],[1179],[1180],[1182],[1183],[1188],[1193],[1196],[1199],[1202],[1208],[1209],[1210],[1211],[1213],[1215],[1219],[1221],[1222],[1225],[1239],[1256]

punctuation in quotes: [983],[986],[1039],[1042],[1043],[1045],[1078],[1104],[1112],[1114],[1193],[1195]
punctuation after quotes: [1053](book),[1088],[1141],[1180],[1181],[1188]