Megatokyo Volume 5 proofreading for Omnibus 2

key:
^ change log from web version to original book
! still needs fixing


pg 7
! should we replace "DC Comics" with "Dark Horse"?

pg 9 / [743]
^ p2 removed ", too"

pg 10 / [744]
! p5 put Sega in italics
! p7 put Sega in italics
! p8 put Nintendo and Dreamcast in italics

pg 11 / [745]
! p3 syllable break is a·maz·ing
! p4 change dashes to em dash
^ p6-9 added chat boxes

pg 203 / [750]
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 14 / [751]
^ p2 end of conversation truncated
^ p5 boldface added to "is"
! p5 change dashes to em dash
^ p6 ".??" changed to single question mark
^ p8 "Well," added, "just" removed, comma removed (but I think the comma should be there)
! p8 restore the comma after "filename"

pg 15 / [752]
^ p1 question mark changed to period
^ p6 ellipsis to period (x2) (2nd and 3rd ones)

pg 16 / [754]
! p5 change dashes to em dash
! p7 change dashes to em dash
! p8 remove extra space in "here before"

pg 17 / [756]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p4 change dashes to em dash
^ p6 part of Piro's dialouge removed

pg 18 / [757]
^ p2 ellipsis to period
! p3 change dashes to em dash
^ p4 question mark to period
! p5 change dashes to em dash
^ p6 Yuki's line put in boldface
! p7 change dashes to em dash

pg 19 / [758]
^ p4 second "all" removed
^ p5 ellipsis removed/changed to period (x3)
^ p6 extra space removed between "that's" and ellipsis, period to exclamation mark

pg 20 / [759]
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 21 / [760]
^ p5 ellipsis to comma

pg 23 / [762]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p6 add comma after "talented"

pg 24 / [763]
! p1 Piro's repetition of "Leave her alone" from the previous page to here seems odd, recommend removing it from one or the other. {FRED FIX}
! p3 change dashes to em dash
^ p4-6 Erika's lines completely changed ("Yet... it appears" to "That's... good.")

pg 26 / [765]
! p6 move question mark out of quotes

pg 28 / [767]
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 29 / [768]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
^ p2 bubbles moved and "just" removed
^ p8 drawing of Yuki moved down to show her face

pg 30 / [769]
^ p2 first ellipsis to comma

pg 31 / [770]
^ p1 first ellipsis removed
^ p2 ellipsis to comma

pg 32 / [771]
! p4 change to "come on" or "c'mon"

pg 33 / [772]
^ p4,5,6 "i" changed to capital

pg 34 / [773]
! p3 capitalize "You"

pg 35 / [777]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
^ p1 five letters capitalized and period added after "medication"
! p1 one more letter to be capitalized in "No i think"
! p6 change dashes to em dash
! p6 capitalize the "i" here
^ p7 "Ow" capitalized

pg 36 / [778]
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 37 / [779]
^ p2 font size of 2nd balloon reduced to match the others

pg 38 / [780]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p6 change dashes to em dash
^ p6 start bracket < added

pg 39 / [781]
^ p2 fourth ellipsis removed
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 40 / [782]
^ p4 brackets <> added to upper right fanboy lines

pg 41 / [783]
^ p3 white outlines added to crowd lines to legibility
! p4 change dashes to em dash
^ p5 space added afer ellipsis, and period moved inside quotes, but
! p5 move the period back outside the quotes

pg 42 / [784]
! p3 put Sega in italics

pg 43 / [785]
! p1 change dashes to em dash

pg 44 / [786]
! p1 Piro's repetition of "I'll be with you in a moment/one second, sir" from the previous page to here seems odd, recommend cutting it from this page. {FRED FIX}
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p3 move question mark to outside quotes
! p4 change 'till to till
! p5 put Anna Miller's in italics

pg 45 / [787]
^ p2 Piro's line changed ("A lonely" to "A what?")
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 46 / [788]
! p2 change damnit to dammit
! p4 change dashes to em dash (x3)

pg 47 / [789]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p4 change dashes to em dash
^ p8 third question mark removed

pg 50 / [793]
! p2,p4 need to white outline at least some of the fanboy lines for legibility {FRED FIX}
^ p3 second ellipsis removed

pg 51 / [794]
! p4 need to white outline at least some of the fanboy lines for legibility {FRED FIX}
^ p8 Yuki's "Tohya!!" put in boldface

pg 52 / [795]
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 53 / [797]
^ [797] switched with [796] in page order
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p5 change dashes to em dash
^ p6 ellipsis to period & exclamation mark to period

pg 55 / [798]
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 56 / [799]
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 59 / [803]
! p2 change dashes to em dash (x2)

pg 62 / [806]
^ p1 "I guess" removed

pg 64 / [808]
^ p3 periods changed to exclamation marks
^ p4 "what if..." changed to "what if I--"
! p4 change dashes to em dash
^ p7 Ping drawing extended to bottom of page

pg 65 / [809]
^ p2 third ellipsis removed

pg 66 / [810]
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 67 / [811]
^ p1 "Ryoya" to "Ryouya"
! p2 put Sight in italics, remove quotes
! p3 put Anna Miller's in italics
! p3 change dashes to em dash
! p4 change dashes to em dash
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 68 / [813]
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 71 / [816]
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 75 / [821]
^ p2 extra period removed

pg 76 / [822]
! p4 change dashes to em dash
! p5 compare txt msg font on phone screen to [816], do you think you could switch one to match the other? {FRED FIX}

pg 78 / [824]
! p5 change "b334" to b33r"
^ p6 extra period removed

pg 80 / [826]
! p2 move dash to previous line

pg 81 / [827]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 217 / [828]
! p1 Recommend just removing the text here. {FRED FIX}

pg 82 / [829]
! p5 change dashes to em dash
! p7 change dashes to em dash

pg 83 / [830]
! p5 change dashes to em dash
! p9 change dashes to em dash

pg 84 / [831]
! p2 need to white outline at least some of the fanboy lines for legibility {FRED FIX}
! p3 change dashes to em dash

pg 86 / [833]
^ p1 Largo's line removed
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 222-225 / [835][836][839][840]
! p1 You want to stick with "Two Weeks" on these or change to "Lost Wings" or whatever? {FRED FIX}

pg 204 / [837]
! p7 change dashes to em dash

pg 88 / [841]
! p1,p3 need to white outline at least some of the fanboy lines for legibility {FRED FIX}
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 89 / [842]
^ p3 apostrophe added

pg 90 / [843]
! p4 In the upper right fanboy line, oddly the white text outline gives out at the very end on the ellipis and end bracket after "bend down and" {FRED FIX}
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 95 / [852]
^ p7 art extended to bottom of page

pg 99 / [856]
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 100 / [857]
! p3 change dashes to em dash
! p4 move period out of quotes
^ p7 ellipsis to period (x2)

pg 101 / [858]
! p5 move question mark out of quotes

pg 102 / [859]
! p1 change damnit to dammit
! p7 change dashes to em dash
! p7 change damnit to dammit

pg 104 / [862]
! p1 change damnit to dammit
^ p2 ellipsis added
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 105 / [863]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 108 / [867]
! p5 change dashes to em dash
! p8 put Sony in italics

pg 110 / [869]
! p3 change dashes to em dash
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 111 / [870]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p3 change dashes to em dash

pg 113 / [872]
! p6 change text to "End Chapter 7"

pg 115 / [875]
! p1 put Megagamers in italics

pg 116 / [876]
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 120 / [880]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 122 / [882]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
^ p7 ellipsis to period

pg 124 / [886]
^ p3-4 extensive changes to Erika's lines (first "I'm sorry" removed, "At least Piro was there" to "As for Piro")

pg 125 / [887]
^ p4 Erika's entire second block of text removed ("You're going to be super famous...")
^ p7 "Woah, there, there." to "Oh Dear."

pg 205 / [889]
! p3 fix "cel" to "cell"

pg 127 / [891]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 132 / [896]
! p3 change dashes to em dash
^ new "beat" panel added between p3 and p4

pg 133 / [897]
^ p3 removed "very" and "afterwards" and added "for the entire trip"
^ p4 changed "watching" to "to watch" and removed "like that", added "hurt and"

pg 135 / [899]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 137 / [901]
! p4 change dashes to em dash
! p5 "gotyou" should be two words {FRED FIX}

pg 138 / [902]
! p5 change "thru" to "through" (if there's room?)
^ p6 extra space in "I'm sorry" was removed

pg 140 / [905]
! p4 put AMD Athlon64 in italics

pg 142 / [908]
^ p6 removed "Uh..."
^ p7 Yanagisawa's lines reduced in font size
! p7 change dashes to em dash (x2)

pg 143 / [909]
! p3 put Megagamers in italics
^ p8 Piro's lines changed extensively ("Hayasaka-san?" to "Uhm...")

pg 145 / [911]
^ p1 some of the excess punctuation removed
^ p5 "Watanabe" change to "Matsui"

pg 146 / [912]
^ p8 "Now" removed

pg 147 / [913]
! p2 change dashes to em dash (x3)
! p4 change dashes to em dash
^ p5 "poured" corrected to "pored"

pg 148 / [914]
^ p1 Erika's lines changed ("I asked him" to "He said he might")
^ p4 "you are" changed to "you're"

pg 149 / [915]
^ p3 ellipsis to period, and "and" removed
! p6 syllable break is di·sas·ter
! p6 change dashes to em dash
^ p9 "so" removed and period added

pg 150 / [916]
^ p2 Erika's lines font size reduced

pg 153 / [920]
! p2 change "demand" to "demands"

pg 154 / [921]
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 155 / [922]
^ p5 ellipsis fixed
^ p6 question mark to period
^ p8 "kind of" added, hyphen added to "build-up", "components" to "stuff", "tend to" to "uh, usually", "because..." removed
^ p9 "embarrassing" fixed
^ p10 "oh" removed
! p11 change dashes to em dash

pg 156 / [923]
! p6 change dashes to em dash
^ p8 "and in here" removed

pg 159 / [926]
^ p5 ellipsis to period

pg 161 / [928]
! p7 change dashes to em dash
^ p8 period to ellipsis

pg 162 / [929]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p8 change dashes to em dash

pg 163 / [930]
! p10 change dashes to em dash

pg 164 / [931]
^ p9 "I dont" removed

pg 165 / [932]
^ p1 "Piro, relax." removed
^ p3 ellipsis to question mark
^ p4 "something happens, and" removed, "wants" to "wanted", "will" to "would"
^ p6 sound effects moved, one less "thump"
! p8 change dashes to em dash

pg 167 / [934]
^ p1 "Your" fixed
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p2 change dashes to em dash
^ p6 period to question mark

pg 168 / [935]
^ p3 "very" to "rather"
^ p6 "Huh?" removed
^ p7 "Me either." to "Neither do I."

pg 170 / [937]
! p3 syllable break is dif·fer·ent

pg 171 / [938]
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 172 / [939]
! p5 change dashes to em dash
^ p7 "actually" removed

pg 173 / [940]
^ p1 "Nanasawa-san!" removed
^ p3 "didn't" and "you" switched, "It's not..." removed
^ p4 ellipsis removed

pg 174 / [941]
^ p4 "I think... I don't" to "I don't think... I"
^ p6 "You have to" removed

pg 176 / [943]
^ p10 "Huh." added, "I better get back to the store." removed

pg 177 / [944]
^ p1 second ellipsis to dashes
! p1 change dashes to em dash
^ p9 "is" to "has been"

pg 178 / [945]
^ p1 ellipsis added

pg 179 / [972]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 180 / [946]
^ p1 "Nothing to be afraid of." removed
! p6 the translation footnote here was removed, but since there's a whole Kimiko translation section in the back, perhaps we add it to there? It kind of is an odd statement without the note. {FRED FIX}
^ p6 "real" removed

pg 181 / [947]
^ p1 "you" removed, "Ping can't speak English either." to "Neither can Ping."
! p1 change dashes to em dash
^ p4 ellipsis fixed

pg 182 / [949]
! p4 change "EDS" to "E.D.S."

pg 183 / [950]
^ p4 "all" put in boldface
^ p7 "some" put in boldface

pg 184 / [951]
^ p1 "So..." added
! p3 add a space after "I'm..."
^ p4 "it's" fixed to "its"
! p9 change dashes to em dash (x2)

pg 185 / [952]
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 186 / [953]
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 187 / [954]
^ p1 apostrophe repositioned in "Sonodas'"
! p3 change dashes to em dash
! p7 change dashes to em dash

pg 188 / [955]
! p9 change dashes to em dash

pg 190 / [957]
! p11 syllable break is be·hav·ior

pg 191 / [958]
! p1 change dashes to em dash

pg 192 / [959]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p10 change dashes to em dash

pg 206 / [960]
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 193 / [961]
^ p2 "don't" put in boldface
! p10 move comma out of quotes

pg 195 / [963]
! p1 change dashes to em dash

pg 196 / [964]
! p5 change dashes to em dash
! p11 change dashes to em dash

pg 207 / DPD intro
! capitalize "i" x3 in paragraph 1

pg 227 / RG p1
! This needs to be adjusted: "New comic pages are published online three times a week on Monday, Wednesday, and Friday at www.megatokyo.com." 
! Change Volume 1/2/3 on chapter summaries to say Omnibus 1?
! chap 2 summary: "before the Tokyo Police shut everything down" should be "shuts"

pg 228 / RG p2
! chap 3 summary: add comma after "Ping's strength to fend him off"
! chap 5 & 6 summaries: remove

pg 229 / RG p3
! Again, change Volume 2/3 references to say Omnibus 1?
! Remove Circuity summary
! Capitalize "i" in "A few years ago i sat down and worked out"
! remove excess end parenthesis at [comics 743-873)]
Timeline, add:
Chapter 9: overlo4d
Day 61 (Tuesday) - Piro meets the NPC, zombies invade, Kimiko's event [comics 983-1125]
Chapter 10: A.F.K.
Day 70 (Thursday) - Miho's friends search for her, dinner at the Sonoda house [comics 1141-1267]

pg 231 / RG p5
! in Ed's description, change "EDS" to "E.D.S."

pg 233 / RG p7
! in Junko's description, fix double "at" in "Student at at Shiritsu Daitou High School."
! add mention of Kumakuma to Sayuri's description, perhaps

Need to add character descriptions for:
Komugiko, Yutaka, Kenji
Probably for:
Yanagisawa
and maybe:
Ririka, Mr. Ibara, Zom-Zom, "Sleepy Shadow", Yutaka's brother, Ninamori





Useful for copy/pastes:
^ p ellipsis to period
^ p ellipsis to dashes
! p change dashes to em dash
! p move question mark out of quotes
! p change quotes to italics on 


The stupid list of one-space sentence breaks that I'm sure only I care about
pg 9/[743] p2 Dom, p3 Ed
pg 14/[751] p5 Piro, p6 Piro
pg 15/[752] p1 Piro, p5 Seraphim
pg 16/[754] p4 Kimiko, p7 Kimiko
pg 114/[755] p4 Piro
pg 17/[756] p1 Piro
pg 18/[757] p5 Piro, p6 Erika, p7 Kimiko, Kimiko, Kimiko
pg 19/[758] p5 Yuki, p8 Piro, Piro
pg 20/[759] p3 Piro, p7 Piro, Piro, p8 Piro, Piro
pg 22/[761] p7 Junko
pg 24/[763] p6 fanboy
pg 30/[769] p7 Piro
pg 35/[777] p2 Largo
pg 37/[779] p3 fanboy, p6 Piro, p8 Piro
pg 38/[780] p1 Piro, p6 Piro
pg 39/[781] p7 Piro
pg 41/[783] p1 Dom
pg 43/[785] p4 Piro
pg 44/[786] p2 Piro, p4 Piro
pg 45/[787] p2 fanboy, p3 fanboy
pg 46/[788] p4 Piro, p5 Miho
pg 47/[789] p2 Piro, p4 Yuki, p8 Kimiko
pg 49/[792] p6 Piro
pg 52/[795] p1 Kimiko, p3 Piro
pg 53/[797] p3 Chiba
pg 56/[799] p1 Erika, p2 Erika, Masamichi, p6 Erika
pg 58/[801] p1 Masamichi
pg 59/[803] p1 Masamichi, p2 Yuki, p5 Yuki
pg 64/[808] p3 Piro
pg 66/[810] p1 Ping
pg 67/[811] p5 Sayuri, Sayuri
pg 68/[813] p6 Kimiko
pg 69/[814] p5 Kimiko, p6 Kimiko
pg 70/[815] p3 Yuki, p4 Miho
pg 71/[816] p7 Ping, Ping, p8 Ping
pg 72/[817] p3 Yuki, p8 Ping
pg 74/[819] p7 Ed, p8 Ed
pg 76/[822] p3 Ping
pg 82/[829] p8 Megumi
pg 83/[830] p4 Megumi, p8 boss, boss, p9 Megumi
pg 85/[832] p8 Largo
pg 88/[841] p2 Kimiko, fanboy, p4 fanboy
pg 90/[843] p8 fanboy
pg 91/[844] p6 fanboy, p7 Piro
pg 92/[849] p1 Largo, p5 Largo
pg 94/[851] p5 Largo, Largo, p6 Largo
pg 96/[853] p3 Largo
pg 98/[855] p4 Pirogoeth
pg 101/[858] p3 Erika, p6 Largo
pg 103/[861] p1 fanboy, pg Kimiko
pg 105/[863] p4 fanboy, p6 Piro
pg 108/[867] p3 fanboy, p5 Piro, p6 fanboy
pg 109/[868] p3 Megumi, p4 Piro
pg 116/[876] p4 Largo
pg 119/[879] p4 Erika
pg 120/[880] p1 Piro, p4 Ping
pg 121/[881] p3 Piro
pg 122/[882] p2 Ping, Miho, p3 Miho, Piro, p4 Ping
pg 123/[883] p1 Miho, p3 Miho, p7 Largo
pg 126/[888] p2 Miho
pg 130/[894] p7 Erika
pg 131/[895] p2 Kimiko
pg 134/[898] p4 Seraphim, p5 Seraphim
pg 135/[899] p4 Seraphim, Piro
pg 137/[901] p5 fanboy
pg 138/[902] p6 Yanagisawa
pg 139/[903] p8 Largo, Junpei
pg 142/[908] p5 Yanagisawa
pg 143/[909] p1 Piro, Piro
pg 145/[911] p1 Matsui
pg 147/[913] p1 Erika, p3 Kimiko
pg 148/[914] p1 Erika (book version), p3 Erika, p4 Erika (book only)
pg 152/[918] p3 Largo, p4 Junko, p6 student, student
pg 155/[922] p1 Erika, p3 Piro
pg 156/[923] p8 Piro
pg 161/[928] p3 Largo
pg 163/[930] p3 student
pg 164/[931] p9 Piro, Erika
pg 166/[933] p3 Asako
pg 167/[934] p2 Ping
pg 171/[938] p4 Kimiko
pg 172/[939] p5 Ping, p7 Ping, Ping
pg 175/[942] p1 Yuki
pg 177/[944] p1 Yuki
pg 180/[946] p6 Kimiko, Kimiko, Kimiko, p8 Kimiko, p9 Ping
pg 182/[949] p7 Ping
pg 183/[950] p3 Ping, p4 Piro, p6 Piro, Piro, Piro
pg 184/[951] p9 Piro, Piro, Piro, Piro
pg 185/[952] p4 Piro
pg 187/[954] p6 Largo
pg 188/[955] p9 Erika, Erika
pg 190/[957] p1 Piro
pg 191/[958] p1 fanboy
pg 193/[961] p10 Largo

plain quotes used: [743],[744],[745],[752],[763],[765],[766],[768],[769],[778],[783],[806],[811],[850],[857],[858],[861],[870],[874],[900],[902],[935]
smart quotes used: [815],[920],[942],[944],[949],[950],[954],[961]

punctuation in quotes: [783](book),[857],[961]
punctuation after quotes: [763],[783](web),