Megatokyo Volume 4 proofreading for Omnibus 2

key:
^ change log from web version to original book
! still needs fixing

general note: a lot of the pages have space in the corner for a page number when there wasn't one put in before


page 9 / [526]
^ p1 "just" removed.
^ p2,3 boxes reduced in size

page 10 / [527]
^ p7 "to know that" to "knowing he might"
^ p8 comma to period

page 11 / [528]
^ p2 "close" to "closer"
^ p3 balloon pointer moved
! p5 remove space between "cluster" and period

page 12 / [529]
^ p2 ellipsis to period
! p3 should be "the remaining components"
! p3 put Playstation in italics
^ p5 ellipsis to period
! p6 need comma after "decency"
^ p7 ellipis to dashes
! p7 change dashes to em dash

page 13 / [530]
^ p1 "wait," removed
! p2 add comma after "it's not"
! p8 put Playstation in italics

page 14 / [531]
^ p1 "That" to "It"

page 15 / [532]
^ p2 "bing*" to "*bing" and the spacing changed
! p2 kerning got messed on that last "*bing", the asterix and b overlap {FRED FIX}
! p6 change "bing*" to "*bing" to match panel 2's change or change panel 2 back {FRED FIX}

page 16 / [533]
^ p1 period added

page 17 / [534]
! p5 remove space between "this!" and end bracket
^ p5 ellipsis to comma

page 18 / [535]
^ p1 ellipsis to period
^ p2 question mark moved into quotation marks (bad)
! p2 put Girl Phase in italics, remove quotes


pg 20 / [537]
^ p6 ellipsis to dashes
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 22 / [539]
^ p3 ellipsis to period
! p5 add comma after "Good morning"
^ p6 ellipsis removed, period to question mark
^ p7 ellipsis removed

pg 24 / [541]
^ p1 ellipsis removed

pg 25 / [543]
^ p1 ellipsis to period
! p1 That period doesn't seem right. Change to question mark or back to ellipsis.
! p5 remove extra space after comma
^ p5 question mark moved into quotation marks (bad)
! p5 move the question mark out of the quotation marks

pg 26 / [544]
^ p2 ellipsis to dashes
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 27 / [545]
^ p6 "This" removed, ellipsis to period

pg 30 / [548]
^ p1 ellipsis to period

pg 195 / [549]
! p3 remove italics on spyware (quotes can stay)
! p4 remove italics on spyware, aware ware, happyware (quotes can stay)
! p4 move period out of quotes

pg 31 / [550]
^ p1 ellipsis to period
^ p8 question mark added
^ p8 ellipsis to dashes
! p8 change dashes to em dash

pg 32 / [551]
^ p3 ellipsis removed
^ p4 removed "head"

pg 34 / [553]
! p4 remove extra space in "high undead"
^ p4 ellipsis to period

pg 36 / [555]
^ p6 ellipsis to dashes
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 37 / [556]
^ p6 ellipsis to period

pg 39 / [558]
! p1 remove second "in" from "I see it in in your eyes."

pg 40 / [559]
^ p1 ellipsis to dashes
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p6 add comma after "Oh"

pg 42 / [561]
! p3 add comma after "Hey" (x2)

pg 44 / [563]
! p1 add comma after "self-centered"
! p2 add apostrophe to "thats"

pg 190 / [564]
! p9 change dashes to em dash

pg 207 / [565]
! p1 correct spelling to "Picnicking" (yet somehow the page title had it correct...) {FRED FIX}

pg 45 / [566]
^ p2 ellipsis to period

pg 204 / [568]
! p1 add period after the parentheses close.

pg 47 / [569]
! p7 add third dot to the ellipsis

pg 48 / [570]
^ p1 ellipsis to dashes
! p1 change dashes to em dash
^ p2 ellipsis to dashes
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 50 / [572]
^ p7 ellipsis to period

pg 51 / [573]
! p2 fix "howabout" to be two words

pg 52 / [574]
^ p2 ellipsis to period
^ p2 ellipsis to dashes
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p3 text too close to spine, need to smoosh balloon to the left a smidge {FRED FIX}

pg 53 / [575]
! p1 fix Ping's model number, it is 44936 not 44396
^ p1, p3 white shadow added for text visibility
! p3 change 'till to till

pg 54 / [576]
^ p5 ellipsis to period

pg 55 / [577]
! p6 move question mark out of quotes

pg 56 / [578]
^ p2 dashes removed
! p3 the *Gasp* is a little tight against the edge, falling into the binding {FRED FIX}
^ p4 ellipsis to exclamation mark

pg 198 / [579]
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 57 / [580]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
^ p3 ellipsis removed
^ p4 comeon changed to come on

pg 58 / [581]
! p2 add apostrophe to goin
 
pg 60 / [583]
! p2 put Sight in italics, remove quotes

pg 63 / [586]
! p4 remove extra space in "self, a sense"
! p6 change damnit to dammit

pg 65 / [589]
^ p4 boldface added

pg 66 / [590]
^ p3 brackets added to Largo's lines (NO! BAD!)
! p3 take the brackets away from Largo's lines again

pg 67 / [591]
^ p1 ellipsis to period
^ p6 "ih" fixed to "ah"
^ p8 boldface added

pg 69 / [593]
^ p3 -kun changed to -san
^ p5 period to exclamation mark
! p6 add ending bracket > to Masamichi's line

pg 70 / [594]
^ p1 ellipsis to dashes
! p1 change dashes to em dash
^ p1 parentheses removed on "Gasp!"

pg 71 / [595]
^ p3 -kun changed to -san

pg 73 / [597]
! p4 remove extra space in "can directly"

pg 74 / [598]
! p2 add comma after "Hi"
^ p2 extra bracket removed
^ p3 ellipsis to dashes
! p3 change dashes to em dash
^ p4 ellipsis to dashes
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 75 / [599]
^ p2 comma added

pg 206 / [600]
! p1 fix the two-dot ellipsis

pg 76 / [601]
! p6 move question mark out of quotes

pg 77 / [602]
! p1 fix the two-dot ellipsis

pg 79 / [604]
^ p1 ellipsis to dashes
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p8 change (Sigh.) to *Sigh*

pg 82 / [607]
! p4 put Megagamers in italics

pg 83 / [609]
! p6 add end bracket > to Erika's line

pg 84 / [610]
! p4 change (Sigh...) to *Sigh*
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 85 / [611]
! p4 Erika's first line is riding into the binding {FRED FIX}
^ p6 ellipsis to dashes
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 86 / [612]
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 87 / [613]
! p3 add apostrophe to goin
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 90 / [616]
! p3 put H&K SOCOM in italics with no boldface
! p3 add period to end of Dom's sentence
! p4 put Sega in italics
^ p7 italics added to Sega

pg 93 / [619]
! p3 remove extra space in "plain, not"
! p4 change dashes to em dash
^ p6 balloon tail move from Largo to Yuki (no, bad!)
! p6 move that balloon tail back to Largo {FRED FIX}

pg 97 / [623]
! p5 put the entire list of consoles in italics
^ p6 boldface added to Largo's lines
! p6 put Dead or Alive Ultimate Fear in bold italics, remove quotes, unless bold italics doesn't work, then just leave it how it is

pg 99 / [626]
! p2 put Tecmo in italics

pg 100 / [627]
^ p3 its changed to it's (no! bad!)
! p3 fix it's back to its
^ p7 the web version's panel 7 removed completely

pg 101 / [628]
! p2 move period out of quotes (x2)
! p8 change dashes to em dash

pg 102 / [629]
^ p6 extra space fixed

pg 103 / [631]
! p1 move question mark to outside quotes

pg 104 / [632]
! p1 put 7-11 in italics
! p4 add closing bracket > to Yanagisawa's line

pg 105 / [633]
! p3 add period to end of sentence (at "integrity")
! p5 remove hyphen in caption box, just "End Chapter 5"

pg 199 / [635]
! p3 put Half-Life in italics

pg 106 / [638]
^ p5 ol'e fixed to ole
! p7 add comma after "aren't real"

pg 107 / [639]
! p1 need to capitalize "actually" in footnote
! p2 move period out of quotes

pg 108 / [641]
! p8 syllable break is ac·tu·al·ly

pg 109 / [642]
! p4 Erika's balloon running into the binding {FRED FIX}
! p8 move period out of quotes

pg 111 / [644]
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 112 / [648]
! p3 change (Sigh) to *Sigh*
! p7 change dashes to em dash

pg 113 / [649]
! p put 7-11 in italics

pg 114 / [650]
^ p7 "pre assembled" given a hyphen
! p7 "pre-assembled" should really be one word

pg 115 / [651]
^ p7 italics added, bracket moved to inside quote

pg 116 / [652]
! p3 No reason for Piro's lines here to be in italics, switch to plain font

pg 118 / [654]
! p3 add end bracket > to Piro's line
! p7 add comma after "Hi"
! p7 make "back pack" one word
! p8 add apostrophe to "Im"

pg 119 / [655]
! p5 Should Piro's "OK" be in brackets? {FRED FIX}(?)

pg 210 / [656]
! p1 needs period after "Sight"
! p1 fix "seem" to "seems"

pg 121 / [658]
! p put Xeon in italics

pg 122 / [659]
! p1 change dashes to em dash x2
^ p7 ellipsis to period

pg 123 / [660]
! p6 remove hyphen from "pre-built" (to "prebuilt")
! p7 put Apple Mac Mini in italics

pg 125 / [662]
! p4 change dashes to em dash
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 127 / [664]
! p8 change dashes to em dash

pg 128 / [665]
^ p6 "Sega" put in italics
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 129 / [666]
^ p5 "Sega" put in italics
! p7 remove extra space in "Oh, and"
^ p7 "TPCD" put in italics

pg 130 / [667]
^ p2 ellipsis to comma
! p3&4 remove italics on Erika's voice mail message, it's not consistent for that to be in italics
! p5 Add question mark to Piro's first line

pg 131 / [668]
! p7 change "EDS" to "E.D.S."

pg 208 / [669]
^ p1 "an (actual)" changed to "an (true)"
! p1 make it "a (true)"

pg 133 / [671]
^ p1 ellipsis to period
! p5 Put the "Gyah!!" in brackets
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 134 / [672]
^ p4 "Happy Veggie" put in italics
! p4 remove the quotes on Happy Veggie

pg 135 / [673]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 136 / [674]
! p1 add comma afer "get a hold of you"
! p2 add comma after "yes"
! p4 move comma out of quotes
^ p5 "Megagamers" put in italics

pg 137 / [675]
! p1 add comma after "Largo-san"

pg 138 / [676]
! p2 add comma after "Yes"
! p4 syllable break is ac·tu·al·ly

pg 212 / [677]
^ p1 paragraph about the flu removed

pg 139 / [678]
! p5 add apostrophe to "Im"

pg 141 / [680]
! p3 change dashes to em dash

pg 143 / [682]
! p2 remove extra space in "that's better"
! p4 remove extra space in "l33t, but"

pg 144 / [683]
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 145 / [684]
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 146 / [685]
! p5 change dashes to em dash
^ p7 Cave of Evil put in italics

pg 147 / [686]
^ p1 Playstation put in italics
^ p1 brackets removed on Piro's line (what? no.)
! p1 restore the brackets on Piro's line
! p3 add apostrophe to end of "friggin"
^ p8 "whose" changed to "who's" (no!)
! p8 change "who's" back to "whose"
^ p10 ellipsis to comma

pg 148 / [687]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p2 change dashes to em dash
^ p4 "here" changed to "her" (Wtf???)
! p4 change "her" back to "here"
! p4 change dashes to em dash
! p5 put Cave in italics, remove quotes

pg 149 / [688]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p4 change "damnit" to "dammit" (x3)
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 150 / [689]
^ p1 ellipsis to period
^ p5 Megagamers put in italics
^ p7 ellipsis removed

pg 191 / [691]
! p1 Dom's line riding into the binding just a little, nudge the text inward a bit
^ p5 Megagamers put in italics

pg 152 / [693]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p4 remove "a" from "only be a 72.3% sure"

pg 154 / [695]
! p2 syllable break is de·press·ing
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p3 change dashes to em dash
^ p7 ellipsis to comma

pg 155 / [696]
^ p3 ellipsis to dashes
! p3 change dashes to em dash
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 156 / [697]
! p5 change 'till to till
! p7 change "you and I" to "you and me" (object pronoun)

pg 157 / [698]
! p2 add comma after "yes"

pg 158 / [699]
! p3 remove extra space in "have a"
! p6 change dashes to em dash
! p7 change dashes to em dash

pg 159 / [700]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 160 / [701]
^ p1 ellipsis to  comma
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p3 change dashes to em dash
! p5 remove extra space in "think fanboys"
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 161 / [702]
! p1 change damnit to dammit
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p3 change dashes to em dash
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 162 / [703]
! p2 add space to "couldat"
! p5 add apostrophe to "eatin"
! p6 move comma out of quotes

pg 164 / [705]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
^ p4 ellipsis to period

pg 165 / [706]
^ p2 question mark to exclamation point

pg 167 / [709]
! p1 add apostrophe to "Yknow"
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p3 add apostrophe to "chant" (chan't)
! p9 add space to "comeon"
! p9 add apostrope to "lets"

pg 168 / [710]

! p3 change dashes to em dash
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 169 / [711]
! p4 remove apostrope from "you'r"
! p5 change dashes to em dash
! p5 change "Ma'm" to "Ma'am"
! p6 change dashes to em dash

pg 171 / [713]
! p2 change dashes to em dash

pg 173 / [715]
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 174 / [716]
! p5 add third dot to ellipsis

pg 175 / [717]
^ p1 "L...L33t" changed to just plain "L33t"

pg 176 / [718]
! p3 change dashes to em dash
! p5 move hyphen up a line, after "Hayasaka" rather than before "san"

pg 177 / [720]
^ p3 ellipsis removed
! p3 change dashes to em dash
^ p7 Piro's line removed

pg 178 / [721]
^ p2 ellipsis removed
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 179 / [722]
^ p1 "Your" changed to "You're" (no!)
! p1 change "You're" back to "Your"
! p4 add apostrophe to "bein"
^ p5 ellipsis to dashes
! p5 change dashes to em dash (x2)
! p7 change dashes to em dash

pg 180 / [723]
^ p2 ellipsis removed
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 181 / [724]
^ p4 ellipsis to period
^ p7 ellipsis to period
! p8 change dashes to em dash

pg 185 / [728]
^ p8 "Uhn" changed to "Mmm"

pg 186 / [729]
! p1 add comma after "hey"
! p4 change dashes to em dash
! p7 remove hyphen in caption box, just "End Chapter 6"

pg 188-189 / Kimiko translation

{FRED FIX}
probably should also add translations for Kimiko's jp lines from [714], [715], and [957]:
[714]
panel 7 <Enough~!  Please stop, Largo-san!!>
[715]
panel 1 <Excuse me~!>
panel 4: <Don't run away, Largo-san!! Calm down~!>
panel 7: <Caught you!>
[957]:
panel 2 <what's wrong?>
panel 3 <Hayasaka-san told him to come over, but he's being an idiot!>
panel 4 <Erika has been wanting to see you all day. She's waiting for you.>
panel 5 <I think you should go to her.>

! add "who" to "but Piro-san said we should post one for readers ____ really want to know."
! Capitalize start of sentences in the Japanese text.
! Remove all the extra spaces in the first line of "panel 4" Japanese text


pg 220 / Circuity pg 6 / [732]
! p2 change dashes to em dash
! p5 change dashes to em dash

pg 221 / Circuity pg 7 / [733]
! p1 change dashes to em dash

pg 222 / Circuity pg 8 / [734]
! p1 change dashes to em dash
! p4 change dashes to em dash
! p7 change dashes to em dash

pg 229 / Circuity pg 15 / [737]
! p4 change dashes to em dash

pg 187 / [742]
! p2 move comma out of quotes
! p2 remove extra space in "amounts of"
! p2 add comma after "and water"





Useful for copy/pastes:
^ p ellipsis to period
^ p ellipsis to dashes
! p change dashes to em dash
! p move question mark out of quotes
! p change quotes to italics on 


The stupid list of one-space sentence breaks that only I care about probably
pg 10/[527] p8 Sayuri
pg 11/[528] p5 Ping, Piro
pg 12/[529] p6 Piro
pg 13/[530] p5 Ping, Ping
pg 17/[534] p1 fan, p2 fan, p3 fan, fan
pg 18/[535] p2 Yanagisawa, Piro, p3 Piro, Yanagisawa
pg 19/[536] p2 Largo
pg 24/[541] p1 Matsui, p3 Kimiko, p5 Kimiko
pg 27/[545] p6 Junpei, Erika
pg 29/[547] p6 Junpei
pg 30/[548] p1 Largo, p6 Junpei
pg 195/[549] p3 Largo, p4 Largo, p6 Largo
pg 31/[550] p3 mom
pg 34/[553] p1 Largo, p6 Erika
pg 37/[556] p7 Yanagisawa
pg 39/[558] p2 player
pg 42/[561] p4 Largo
pg 43/[562] p1 Largo
pg 44/[563] p2 Yuki, p3 Yuki
pg 190/[564] p1 Dom, p2 Dom, p9 Ed
pg 45/[566] p4 Yuki
pg 49/[571] p2 Asmodeus
pg 52/[574] p3 Largo
pg 56/[578] p2 Yanagisawa
pg 57/[580] p2 student, p3 fanboy, Piro, p4 fanboy
pg 58/[581] p1 Erika, p5 Junko
pg 59/[582] p4 fanboy
pg 61/[584] p1 fanboy
pg 63/[586] p1 announcement, p4 Ed
pg 67/[591] p5 Kimiko, p6 man-Moeko
pg 68/[592] p1 Junko, p2 Largo
pg 69/[593] p5 Largo, Kimiko, p6 Masamichi
pg 70/[594] p3 Kimiko
pg 72/[596] p2 Masamichi
pg 75/[599] p2 Ping, p5 Ping
pg 76/[601] p1 Ping
pg 77/[602] p3 Piro
pg 81/[606] p5 Miho
pg 196/[608] p1 Pirogoeth, p3 Largo, p7 Largo, p8 Pirogoeth
pg 83/[609] p6 Erika
pg 85/[611] p6 Kimiko, Kimiko
pg 86/[612] p5 Miho
pg 87/[613] p3 Not-Seraphim, p4 Not-Seraphim
pg 90/[616] p4 Dom
pg 91/[617] p8 Erika
pg 93/[619] p2 Kimiko, p4 Kimiko, p5 Kimiko, p6 Piro, Kimiko, Piro, p7 Largo
pg 94/[620] p1 Piro, p2 Largo, p7 Piro
pg 95/[621] p7 Piro, p8 Yuki
pg 96/[622] p7 Piro
pg 97/[623] p1 Kimiko, p5 Erika, Erika
pg 202/[634] p1 Largo
pg 199/[635] p2 caption, p5 caption
pg 108/[641] p6 Erika
pg 109/[642] p7 Junpei
pg 110/[643] p6 Piro
pg 113/[649] p1 Largo
pg 116/[653] p1 Largo
pg 118/[654] p6 Ping
pg 119/[655] p7 Piro, Piro, Piro
pg 120/[657] p1 Largo
pg 121/[658] p1 Piro, p4 Piro
pg 122/[659] p2 Ping
pg 125/[662] p4 shopkeeper, shopkeeper, p7 shopkeeper, p8 shopkeeper, p9 shopkeeper, shopkeeper
pg 126/[663] p1 Piro, p5 Kimiko, Kimiko, p6 Piro, p7 Piro
pg 127/[664] p2 Piro, Piro, p3 Matsui, p8 Piro
pg 128/[665] p4 Dom
pg 129/[666] p7 Dom
pg 130/[667] p4 Kimiko, p5 Piro
pg 131/[668] p3 Piro, p9 Junpei
pg 135/[673] p3 Piro, Largo, p4 Erika
pg 136/[674] p2 Junpei, p5 Meimi, p7 Meimi
pg 137/[675] p1 Piro, p3 Meimi, p6 Erika
pg 138/[676] p4 Largo, p5 Largo, Meimi
pg 139/[678] p5 Piro, p6 Piro
pg 140/[679] p4 Piro
pg 142/[681] p8 Largo
pg 145/[684] p5 Meimi
pg 148/[687] p1 Miho, p2 Piro, Ping, p5 Miho
pg 149/[688] p4 Piro
pg 150/[689] p6 Kimiko
pg 151/[690] p1 Kimiko, p6 Yanagisawa, Yanagisawa
pg 152/[693] p7 Ping
pg 154/[695] p2 Mumu, p3 Mumu, p7 Kimiko
pg 155/[696] p3 Ping
pg 156/[697] p3 Piro, Largo
pg 157/[698] p5 Largo
pg 158/[699] p4 Mumu, Shigeo, p5 Mumu, Mumu, Mumu, p6 Mumu
pg 159/[700] p4 Mumu, Mumu, p6 Mumu
pg 160/[701] p1 Piro, p4 Ping
pg 165/[706] p2 Piro
pg 166/[707] p3 Ping
pg 168/[710] p5 Piro
pg 169/[711] p6 Piro, p7 Largo
pg 174/[716] p2 Kimiko, p4 Kimiko, p5 Kimiko
pg 176/[718] p2 Kimiko, p3 Kimiko
pg 177/[720] p5 Piro, Piro
pg 178/[721] p4 Piro
pg 181/[724] p6 Piro
pg 183/[726] p2 Matsui, p3 Matsui, Matsui
pg 219/circuity pg5 p5 Largo
pg 220/circuity pg6/[732] p4 Piro
pg 222/Circuity pg8/[734] p2 Largo
pg 223/Circuity pg9/[735] p9 Largo
pg 229/Circuity pg15/[737] p2 Largo, p4 Piro


notes for future reference
plain quotes used: [527],[534],[535],[543],[546],[548],[549],[553],[557],[561],[563],[568],[574],[576],[577],[583],[597],[601],[628],[638],[639],[642],[651],[674],[680],[685],[687],[690],[702],[717],[719],[742]
"smart" quotes used:
punctuation in quotes: [563],[628],[639],[642],[674],[687],[703],[742]
punctuation after quotes: [561],[574]